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15.4 Descriptive Essay

Learning Objective

  1. Read an example of the descriptive rhetorical mode.

America’s Pastime

As the sun hits my face and I breathe in the fresh air, I temporarily forget that I am at a sporting event. But when I open my eyes and look around, I am reminded of all things American. From the national anthem to the international players on the field, all the sights and sounds of a baseball game come together like a slice of Americana pie.

First, the entrance turnstiles click and clank, and then a hallway of noise bombards me. All the fans voices coalesce in a chorus of sound, rising to a humming clamor. The occasional, “Programs, get your programs, here!” jumps out through the hum to get my attention. I navigate my way through the crowded walkways of the stadium, moving to the right of some people, to the left of others, and I eventually find the section number where my seat is located. As I approach my seat I hear the announcer’s voice echo around the ball park, “Attention fans. In honor of our country, please remove your caps for the singing of the national anthem.” His deep voice echoes around each angle of the park, and every word is heard again and again. The crowd sings and hums “The Star-Spangled Banner,” and I feel a surprising amount of national pride through the voices. I take my seat as the umpire shouts, “Play ball!” and the game begins.

In the fifth inning of the game, I decide to find a concessions stand. Few tastes are as American as hot dogs and soda pop, and they cannot be missed at a ball game. The smell of hot dogs carries through the park, down every aisle, and inside every concourse. They are always as unhealthy as possible, dripping in grease, while the buns are soft and always too small for the dog. The best way to wash down the Ball Park Frank is with a large soda pop, so I order both. Doing my best to balance the cold pop in one hand and the wrapped-up dog in the other, I find the nearest condiments stand to load up my hot dog. A dollop of bright green relish and chopped onions, along with two squirts of the ketchup and mustard complete the dog. As I continue the balancing act between the loaded hot dog and pop back to my seat, a cheering fan bumps into my pop hand. The pop splashes out of the cup and all over my shirt, leaving me drenched. I make direct eye contact with the man who bumped into me and he looks me in the eye, looks at my shirt, tells me how sorry he is, and then I just shake my head and keep walking. “It’s all just part of the experience,” I tell myself.

Before I am able to get back to my seat, I hear the crack of a bat, followed by an uproar from the crowd. Everyone is standing, clapping, and cheering. I missed a home run. I find my aisle and ask everyone to excuse me as I slip past them to my seat. “Excuse me. Excuse me. Thank you. Thank you. Sorry,” is all I can say as I inch past each fan. Halfway to my seat I can hear discarded peanut shells crunch beneath my feet, and each step is marked with a pronounced crunch.

When I finally get to my seat I realize it is the start of the seventh inning stretch. I quickly eat my hot dog and wash it down with what is left of my soda pop. The organ starts playing and everyone begins to sing “Take Me Out to the Ball Game.” While singing the song, putting my arms around friends and family with me, I watch all the players taking the field. It is wonderful to see the overwhelming amount of players on one team from around the world: Japan, the Dominican Republic, the United States, Canada, and Venezuela. I cannot help but feel a bit of national pride at this realization. Seeing the international representation on the field reminds me of the ways that Americans, though from many different backgrounds and places, still come together under common ideals. For these reasons and for the whole experience in general, going to a Major League Baseball game is the perfect way to glimpse a slice of Americana.

Online Descriptive Essay Alternatives

Susan Berne visits New York and describes her impressions in Where Nothing Says Everything, also called Ground Zero:

  • http://thepurpleenglishteacher.files.wordpress.com/2010/10/groundzero.pdf
  • http://www.nytimes.com/2002/04/21/travel/where-nothing-says-everything.html

Heather Rogers provides a detailed description (book excerpt) of a landfill that challenges the reader to consider his or her own consumption and waste in The Hidden Life of Garbage:

  • http://www.alternet.org/story/27116
  • http://books.google.com/books?id=efUymAhM_tAC&pg=PA12&lpg=PA12&dq= the+hidden+life+of+garbage+by+heather+rogers+%22in+the+dark+chill+of+early+ morning%22&source=bl&ots=7c4hoFLhTp&sig=ngecGSS27blb9zoy8wLaJX8la_o&hl= en&ei=Vi7xTKDKG4zSsAP2hdGtCw&sa=X&oi=book_result&ct=result&resnum= 1&ved=0CBgQ6AEwAA#v=onepage&q&f=false

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  • Chapter 1: Introduction to Writing

    • 1.1 Reading and Writing in College
    • 1.2 Developing Study Skills
    • 1.3 Becoming a Successful College Writer
    • 1.4 Introduction to Writing: End-of-Chapter Exercises
  • Chapter 2: Writing Basics: What Makes a Good Sentence?

    • 2.1 Sentence Writing
    • 2.2 Subject-Verb Agreement
    • 2.3 Verb Tense
    • 2.4 Capitalization
    • 2.5 Pronouns
    • 2.6 Adjectives and Adverbs
    • 2.7 Misplaced and Dangling Modifiers
    • 2.8 Writing Basics: End-of-Chapter Exercises
  • Chapter 3: Punctuation

    • 3.1 Commas
    • 3.2 Semicolons
    • 3.3 Colons
    • 3.5 Apostrophes
    • 3.6 Parentheses
    • 3.7 Dashes
    • 3.8 Hyphens
    • 3.9 Punctuation: End-of-Chapter Exercises
  • Chapter 4: Working with Words: Which Word Is Right?

    • 4.1 Commonly Confused Words
    • 4.2 Spelling
    • 4.3 Word Choice
    • 4.4 Prefixes and Suffixes
    • 4.5 Synonyms and Antonyms
    • 4.6 Using Context Clues
    • 4.7 Working with Words: End-of-Chapter Exercises
  • Chapter 5: Help for English Language Learners

    • 5.1 Word Order
    • 5.2 Negative Statements
    • 5.3 Count and Noncount Nouns and Articles
    • 5.4 Pronouns
    • 5.5 Verb Tenses
    • 5.6 Modal Auxiliaries
    • 5.7 Prepositions
    • 5.8 Slang and Idioms
    • 5.9 Help for English Language Learners: End-of-Chapter Exercises
  • Chapter 6: Writing Paragraphs: Separating Ideas and Shaping Content

    • 6.1 Purpose, Audience, Tone, and Content
    • 6.2 Effective Means for Writing a Paragraph
    • 6.3 Writing Paragraphs: End-of-Chapter Exercises
  • Chapter 7: Refining Your Writing: How Do I Improve My Writing Technique?

    • 7.1 Sentence Variety
    • 7.2 Coordination and Subordination
    • 7.3 Parallelism
    • 7.4 Refining Your Writing: End-of-Chapter Exercises
  • Chapter 8: The Writing Process: How Do I Begin?

    • 8.1 Apply Prewriting Models
    • 8.2 Outlining
    • 8.3 Drafting
    • 8.4 Revising and Editing
    • 8.5 The Writing Process: End-of-Chapter Exercises
  • Chapter 9: Writing Essays: From Start to Finish

    • 9.1 Developing a Strong, Clear Thesis Statement
    • 9.2 Writing Body Paragraphs
    • 9.3 Organizing Your Writing
    • 9.4 Writing Introductory and Concluding Paragraphs
    • 9.5 Writing Essays: End-of-Chapter Exercises
  • Chapter 10: Rhetorical Modes

    • 10.1 Narration
    • 10.2 Illustration
    • 10.3 Description
    • 10.4 Classification
    • 10.5 Process Analysis
    • 10.6 Definition
    • 10.7 Comparison and Contrast
    • 10.8 Cause and Effect
    • 10.9 Persuasion
    • 10.10 Rhetorical Modes: End-of-Chapter Exercises
  • Chapter 11: Writing from Research: What Will I Learn?

    • 11.1 The Purpose of Research Writing
    • 11.2 Steps in Developing a Research Proposal
    • 11.3 Managing Your Research Project
    • 11.4 Strategies for Gathering Reliable Information
    • 11.5 Critical Thinking and Research Applications
    • 11.6 Writing from Research: End-of-Chapter Exercises
  • Chapter 12: Writing a Research Paper

    • 12.1 Creating a Rough Draft for a Research Paper
    • 12.2 Developing a Final Draft of a Research Paper
    • 12.3 Writing a Research Paper: End-of-Chapter Exercises
  • Chapter 13: APA and MLA Documentation and Formatting

    • 13.1 Formatting a Research Paper
    • 13.2 Citing and Referencing Techniques
    • 13.3 Creating a References Section
    • 13.4 Using Modern Language Association (MLA) Style
    • 13.5 APA and MLA Documentation and Formatting: End-of-Chapter Exercises
  • Chapter 14: Creating Presentations: Sharing Your Ideas

    • 14.1 Organizing a Visual Presentation
    • 14.2 Incorporating Effective Visuals into a Presentation
    • 14.3 Giving a Presentation
    • 14.4 Creating Presentations: End-of-Chapter Exercises
  • Chapter 15: Readings: Examples of Essays

    • 15.1 Introduction to Sample Essays
    • 15.2 Narrative Essay
    • 15.3 Illustration Essay
    • 15.4 Descriptive Essay
    • 15.5 Classification Essay
    • 15.6 Process Analysis Essay
    • 15.7 Definition Essay
    • 15.8 Compare-and-Contrast Essay
    • 15.9 Cause-and-Effect Essay
    • 15.10 Persuasive Essay
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Write an essay with the title: The hailstorm.

I was hurrying as fast as I could, but my heavy school backpack dragged me slower. The air smelled fresh, with gust of damp wind, and the sky grew darker and darker. Yet it had a strange yellowish glow. As I turned into our street I heard it: a roaring and rattling, somewhere behind me, like marbles spilled on metal. Then it was on me: hail! The sound was of it drumming on the tin roofs all around.

Thousands of tiny ice bullets stung my head and face and shoulders, and the backs of my legs as I raced on, now bending over to protect myself. At last I made it inside and slammed the door behind me. The warmth of the dry air inside cuddled me, as I shivered in my wet uniform. I hauled off my bag, threw it down and ran to the window.

It was exciting! The stones, as big as marbles, pounded down on the tar road brick pathway and bounced up again, like shining popcorn. All normal sounds were muffled by the hail. Within minutes a magical carpet of whiteness lay over everything. Our suburb was transformed into an Antarctic scene. There was no-one out; not even a car drove past.

As suddenly as it arrived, the hailstorm passed on, and out of every house we ran to examine to grab up the hailstones, to crunch on their iciness, laugh and share their wonder. We threw ice-balls, slipped and skidded on the roads. Our fingers were cold as icicles themselves.

But, all too soon the ice began melting away, the sky lightened, sunshine shone through.

The magic was over, but we were still under its spell, laughing and playing in the growing puddles. Not everyone loved it – my uncle was furious with the hail; it dented his car. But for me, it was one of those special memories I’ll never forget.

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I have an essay that..due Monday help please… Topic: is about extremely hot\cold weather
Badrunnisha ·
5 months ago

Hello Nontuthuzelo – think about your best day, what happened? Who was there? Where were you? WHY was it the best day? Talk about how you felt. Start off with writing where you were – set the scene, describe it. GOOD LUCK!
Shelley Bolles ·
7 months ago

Guys:),mind to help me out,I have an essay that is due on friday..The topic is “The best day of my life”.
Nontuthuzelo ·
7 months ago

Awesome essay 😊😊
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